Denied [Guild application]Boktai:sun is in your hand(GBA)review

[happymasksalesman happymasksalesman]

Hello! after a while I finish my first review and try for become writer guild!
Sorry if it isn't 10k limit it's a bit hard to control your characters on phone.
Well here it comes:

 

[Stingy Perry Stingy Perry]

I only played Boktai through emulation and thanks for the Solar Sensor patch it made me enjoy the game without worrying about running out of sun power.

 

[happymasksalesman happymasksalesman]

Well I play half of game with patch without knowing it exist. You don't know how pain it was. I thought it work with clock then I find out it work with solar sensor.
(*just remembered I try to find a way to connect a solar sensor to my Pentium 4!)
I thought the game is impossible to play like yoshi story!

 

[Stingy Perry Stingy Perry]

The same in my case the first time I played it is with a regular rom and the it hit me I’m out of sun power and I said to my self this thing is impossible to beat at this condition.

 

[happymasksalesman happymasksalesman]

In boktai 2 this is completely impossible to play game with out sun control.
I remember right,I play game and defeat all 3 servants except one carmillia(still fell sad for her for what happend to her) for some reason she isn't an idiot like others. You had to turn your sun bar to 0 to make her show herself(only boss have a chance to escape from pile driver!) That was where is said "this is impossible!"
I play until there with using solar nuts and other things(sometimes accidentally give one or 2 sun bar to myself).

 

[Stingy Perry Stingy Perry]

Another thing I loved about Boktai for me is it feels like you’re playing a Castlevania game with MGS mechanics. Just take a look at Django he looks like a blonde young version of Snake with shorts instead of tactical pants.

 

[happymasksalesman happymasksalesman]

He act like link in legend of zelda too. Don't talk much. Well this series end on DS.

 

[Stingy Perry Stingy Perry]

He act like link in legend of zelda too. Don't talk much. Well this series end on DS.

Yeah Lunar Knights at first it thought it was a part of the Lunar series, silly me. Kojima really cooked up something awesome with this series.

 

[happymasksalesman happymasksalesman]

Well not kojima is in konami anymore and not this series gonna get a new one. Well I heard and see a fan made boktai.
(*remember the damn puzzle about count diary*) seriously if I see count in real life i gonna shot him all silver bullets in world!

 

[JustLooking123]

Hi @happymasksalesman!
I have read your review, and i must say it's quite comprehensive!
And i think it can turn into something great!

But right now, there are some problems with it:

1- I noticed many typos, and the grammar could use some improvement.
I recommend using an AI tool to enhance your text.
Having proper English is a crucial factor in getting your Guild Application accepted.

2- The formatting could be improved.
This one is more of a nitpick... but it’s recommended to structure your article in a way that avoids the appearance of a "wall of text".
Adding line breaks in appropriate places and using headings for section titles can help a lot.
Also, adding a few images can make the article more visually appealing and engaging.

I hope this helps, and if you need any help, just ask!
Wishing you the best!

 

[happymasksalesman happymasksalesman]

Thanks to read it whole I will fix it.
Well I try joining writer guild so I didn't add any image.
about gramer well I gonna improve it and break text wall.

 

[JustLooking123]

By the way, i consulted a professional, and here’s a correction to my recommendations:
For Guild Applications, posting a file is also accepted.
This method allows you to bypass the 10,000-character limit.
Additionally, you can use Word files (.doc or .docx), which enable you to format your article and even add images if you like.
I hope this helps, and i'm really sorry for my earlier misinformation.

 

[Yousef Yousef]

upon a closer look, we’ve evaluated that even with the aid of AI, your text would likely still not be up to standard. There are things that can’t be fixed with a simple grammar checker, there’s far deeper comprehension and readability problems that you’re gonna have to work out on your own. AI is a great tool, but it won’t help if you lack the frame of reference necessary to understand your own grammatical errors. I’m very sorry.